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The poem doesn't strike deep emotion in my heart, but I love the POEM, itself. I'm head over heels for the rhyming pattern and the rhythm (which is a bit ...

You seem to make this simplest moments so vivid and abstract and detailed - you can turn a flashing moment into a work of art. Please keep on.

Random, but I must concur - it's amusing, and an interesting tidbit of history. Thanks. *is flipping through a gigantic Shakespeare novel to find act 1 of Julius Caesar*

I actually found this sort of offensive and rude, but I don't want to pick a fight. I suppose it was...cute...

as I stroll across the sand that gives me belonging Into the thick sand that lays at the edge of the endless volumes of the sea these lines are too ...

It does add that feeling. You were successful.

The life you love will only go as far as the bottom of the wick. that made me shiver fix beyond... --You seem to be writing more poetry lately. I'm ...

Wow. I loved this, I loved this feeling, and I understand what you mean. All I have is praise for this. So sorry I can't offer any constructive critisizm, but ...

I'd hate to sound stupid, but I really can't understand the..er...language in this poem. I bet it means something. Really. But it's vague with all the forgien-ness.

that fell from the clouds that enveloped me; that fell from the clouds and enveloped me. or something without two "that's"

every shell can hear the sound of the sea. even the smallest, the weakest and most brittle echo with ocean music. for some odd reason, i didn't like this. it ...

Expand on this. It's too short to provide a proper critique to this - each line is also sort of disjointed from the next. coupe cope start using punctuation. please ...

stop trying to rhyme, because when you rhyme you usually should have a more steady rhythm...which isn't upheld in this poem.

E is for Everlasting Stupidity, oh, come on! that's cheating! you have to think of something that actually starts with E. =]

i actually didn't think this was too short, which is something i usually do so...it's a compliment, i suppose. you made your point strong and quick, with a touch of ...